proofreader, anyone?

[DanL]

Hello all, I just wrote an article for my website about breeding Lamprologus Ocellatus...

I am looking for some proofreaders... If you feel like reading it over and post a any comments that you have about it that would be great. Just post back in this thread...

the link to the article --> http://www.our-oasis.net/main/abro

I am still working on the layout of the article but the content is all there... The article is not findable by the general public as of yet and wont be linked anywhere on my site yet until after proofreading ...

thank you...

 

[nimbusv]

It's well written, but if you'd include pictures of the whole process would make it more attractive!

 

[Molino]

Great article, thanks for sharing.

I wasn't really reading it to proofread, but one thing stuck out at me:
"Now for algae control, a single Ancistrus does the job very well, the Ancistrus does seem to bother the Ocellatus at all. "

I'm asuming this should say "the Ancistrus does not seem to bother..."

 

[DanL]

nim
great idea. check now I added some...

Molino
got it, thanks...

 

[DanL]

there, I think I finally got the layout set... anymore comments?

 

[inkfish86]

Can you leave the link "hot" through the evening? I'd like to check it out, but won't have a chance until this evening.

 

[DanL]

sure, infact the link is clickable on my website now also...